Tags
Ciel, Kagura Himiko, Maid, RPG, Schoolgirl, Umenomiya Alice, Umenomiya Kana, Visual Novel, Yuri
It’s been rough days lately, mostly because my stupid Internet Service Provider acting up and causing my internet to run at speed beetween 0-5KB (it’s mostly 0KB though).
Despite that I manage to finish this video, my first video that I created and uploaded to youtube!! This is truly an awe-inspiring moment in my life *0* !!!
Background music is: 草原ダンスィング♪ by Rengoku-Teien, please visit their website http://rengoku-teien.com/soundbooth.html
Please keep in mind that the Indiegogo campaign is not live yet, I plan to release the campaign this week, hopefully everything goes smoothly.
Edit: I reuploaded the video, now it has better grammar 
! Special thanks to Teresa and Ren!
Sorry to post this here, but I don’t see an option to message you privately (and I’m in a bit of a hurry): there’s a mistake at the beginning “I haven’t memorize(d)”.
You might want to correct that, as first impressions are everything. I haven’t managed to see it all to report other typos, but I might manage to from home, if you want it proofread.
Best of luck with the campaign!
yes. please proofread it!! big thanks in advance!!! I love you *O* !!!
Sorry to post it here, but I can’t seem to find a way to send you a message through your site (it’s something I’d advise to fix, since people may not have a FB, WP or Twitter account):
0:01
… I haven’t memorize(d) the script yet…
0:14
Let’s start from (the) title screen.
0:20
Up next is the world map screen.
0:23
The green colored [...] by (the) Dogma empire.
0:27
… is positioned in Area 17 (Unless Area 17 is the proper name of a city).
(I have problems seeing apostrophes on this font, but I’d say you miss one in the next lines.)
0:41
… by attacking Mino’s (or Minos’ if the name is Minos) labyrinth.
1:06
I didn’t know that I could pull cool stunts like that!
1:22
I didn’t expect a surprise attack this early… (no need for a period after ellipses)
1:26
H-Himiko-san, that’s not the problem here… (same as above about the ellipses+period)
1:30
I accidentally made too many yesterday. (For things which you can count, like cookies, you use many, for things you can’t, like dough, you use much.)
1:36
I heard that!!! (Past tense is better here.)
1:46 (apostrophe again)
And don’t forget to support our campaign!
Behold!! Now “about me” page has contact form!!
Now that I think about it, I actually has a contact form in draft mode already, but I didn’t publish it for some reason that I can’t remember o.o; … . I guess I’m getting old >.<
Anyway, thanks a lot for all the proofreading, you're so totally awesome!!!